If I see a shark I will go on a board and not swimming home and there is a big shark and he can eat a fat man or 100 and 100 people because the shark is big and it can eat you if I see a shark I will run fast in the water but I have saw a shark and I run and run fast but I do not got eat in but the shark and I can not go to him he will eat and my mum and dad will be sad and cry for me but I will save my brother and my sister. Everyone is nice to me and my family.
kia-ora Muhammad Tasman here I like your post about the shark and the tunnel in our backyard maybe you could fix the writing like I will go on a board and not swimming home and there is a big shark and he can eat a fat man or 100 and 100 people because the shark is big and it can eat you if I see a shark I will run fast in the water but I have saw a shark and I run and run fast but I do not got eat in but the shark and I can not go to him he will eat and my mum and dad will be sad and cry for me but not all of it makes scents so what u could do is arrange it like this if I see a shark i will go on a board and not swim home well anyways i like the post have you read the book?
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Hi Muhammad I really like your shark post but next time you can put more adverbs in it? But its good. Dont forget to check out my blog ok. Blog you later byee.
ReplyDeleteHi its me Josh.
ReplyDeleteI like your writing it was a bit sad though.
I like the fat man bit, it was really funny.
Are you going to write anymore stories?
BLOG YA LATER JOSH😆😆😆😆
Hi Muhammad,
ReplyDeleteSamantha from room 7 here.
I really like your work!
Maybe next time you could add some punctuation in.
Do you like to write?
Samantha.
my name is not muhammad my name is arshad
ReplyDeleteHello Muhammad,
ReplyDeleteEmma from Room 24 here,
I really like how you described if you were in it. I have done something exactly like this but I didn't describe it like that. I think that you should maybe add some comma and some more full stops. You should check out my blog!
Did you enjoy writing this?
Blog you later!
Emma
Hi Muhammad it is Christian from Room 8. The writing u did was great. I dont think I can do that. Cool sentences and Im sure that u did everythingright. Bye
ReplyDeletethank you everyone for liking my blog.
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